Film Script-First Draft

Below is the first draft for my film script,which is unfinished because I will be making a second when it is closer to the filming day.Ive also made a few errors too-the writing does not make sense in places so I will need to amend this by the time I start filming :

Bradley Broughton                                                         Film script

STARRING: Richard Broughton, Jack Morgan

DIRECTED BY: Bradley Broughton

 [POV SHOT LOOKING DOWN OF CHARACTER RUNNING]

PAUL: “HELLO?”

PHILLIP: “HI PAUL.ITS PHILLIP? SUPRISED THEY HAVENT CAUGHT YOU YET”

PAUL:OH ITS SO GOOD TO HEAR YOU

PHILLIP:YEAH YOU TOO.NEARLY WHOLE SECTOR HAS BEEN STAMPED NOW.

PAUL:OUR LIVES ARE JUST TELEVISION SHOWS NOW TO ENTERTIAIN THE GOVERNMENT.

PHILLLIP:YEAH THE PRESIDENT HAS ISSUED EVERYONE WHO GETS STAMPED WITH A GUN TO “PATROL”WITH.THAT MEANS LOOKING FOR PEOPLE WHO ESCAPED –LIKE YOURSELF.

PAUL:WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY STAMPED?

PHILLIP:THEY WATCH YOU DIRECTLY FROM THE TOWER.WHERE ARE YOU?

PAUL:NOT QUITE SURE.I THINK IM IN SOUTH DISTRICT

PHILLIP:BUT IT’S THE RAVENS THAT ARE THE REAL PROBLEM

PAUL:TELL ME ABOUT IT.THEIR WATCHING EVERYWHERE FOR ESCAPPES

PHILLIP:KEEP TO THE SHADOWS,THE RAVENS ARE HUNGRY THIS TIME OF DAY

PHILLIP:SOUTH DISTRICT!OH IM SORRY.SO SORRY.

PAUL:WHAT DO YOU MEAN?

PHILLIP:IVE.BEEN.PROMOTED.I HAD TO  PROTECT MY FAMILY.THEY WHERE YOU ARE NOW!RUN!

PAUL:OH GOD TRAITOR[DROPS PHONE]HES REVEALED MY LOCATION

THE ANTAGONIST:THANK YOU PHILLIP, BUT YOU DID NOT HAVE TO BETRAY YOUR FRIEND AFTER ALL.HES ALREADY BEEN TAKEN CARE OF!

PAUL:[LOOKING DOWN AT HAND]GASP!

THE ANTAGONIST:I SPY WITH MY LITTLE EYE[CAMERA ZOOMS ON EYE TATOO IN CENTRE OF HAND)
PAUL:HOW DID THIS HAPPEN?

THE ANTAGONIST:SOMETHING BEGINNING WITH S.

PAUL:I WAS NEVER STAMPED! ITS IMPOSSIBLE!

THE ANATGONIST:DO YOU GIVE UP YET?THE ANSWER TO THE RIDDLE WAS SLEEPING. YOU WERE STAMPED WHILST YOU WERE ASLEEP!

ANTAGONIST:ENJOY YOUR LAST MOMENTS BEFORE THE RAVENS FIND YOU!(SOUND EFFECT OF GUN FIRE)

PHILLIP:RUN!

END-PHONE RINGING SOUND EFFECT.

                                                        Filmskills-how to write a script

This video explains some key tips on how to write a script which I found very valuable when constructing my own product.

Audience Feedback

As I recorded my audience feedback , I found that action was the most popular genre with my target audience and they also thought it should be filmed in an "urban environment", such as a city. Furthermore, I thought I would be unable to make a decent action short film because there was a lack of budget. Using the feedback I decided to record most of the footage outside. I think the video proves that young people don't have much knowledge about Short films possibly because they are not marketed at a bigger audience , like the recent blockbuster. Additionally , I found that the cinema was still very popular , despite having competition with online streaming services such as Netflix.

marking criteria

I looked at the marking criteria for my blog and gave myself a grade, which I thought it would be

awarded by an examiner. I looked through all the points and evaluated whether or not I had achieved them. It will be interesting to see how close my mark is to that of my teacher. I think that it will be helpful to mark my own blog before the teacher as it is giving me practice with assessing work.It allows me to judge my own blog and see how I can amend it.

Weather reports

An important part of my planning is that I need to decided the day to begin filming.This can be difficult since the British weather has a reputation for being unpredictable.Because of this, I thought it would be a good idea to browse the internet and see what day was the best weather wise to start producing the film.

Here are so screenshots from my investigation:

Todays weather forecast on BBC weather

Weather across the UK at this moment in time

survey monkey results

I found that by using Survey monkey , I had a better idea of what the public thought about the short film medium. My results show that most people have seen a short film, so that it is made me more positive about the work I was doing.Strangely , I was surprised that most thought music was the most popular aspect of short films and do I decided to take a longer amount of time choosing the score and sound effects. I wondered what the most popular genre of film would be , but audiences seems to prefer a mix.Finally , most people seem to consume films through television.

There is an even number of people who both enjoy and don't like short films. This result surprised me as An overwhelming amount of people had experienced the short film form.Maybe this is to do with the shorts advertised at the beginning of the main feature , like Disney often do.

These results show that animation is very popular in short film.I don't think that live action short films are in the publics consciousness as much as the likes of animation , which is more popular as families often watch these together.

surprisingly, twice the number of people I asked seem to think music is the key component in a short film.As a direct result of this , I decided to spend a longer time period choosing the score and sound effects as it seems to be key to their success.

Here , there seems to be no genre that is more popular than the others.I have decided to choose my own genre as they seem to be equally popular.

Most people find it easier to watch films through television , probably because it costs less and is more accessible.What this shows me is that people generally would not go out their way to see a short film.

Film Poster -design progress

This is the first draft of my film poster to promote my film which I created using photoshop. It took me a while to get everything to scale and in the correct place. I decided to use a red text as it was striking and contrasted well with the yellow background. I attempted to include the conventions that make a successful poster , including a tagline, seeing is believing, and credits below the title.These images are the development of my poster at different stages.I attempted to keep the main image as simplistic as possible , in order to ensure it was not overpopulated with images that overwhelm the audience.

location recce

                                                                 Recce Planning

I will be shooting my film around my neighborhood. I can't think of many health and safety risks mainly because most of the film wont have much action involved.To minimize any risks I will make sure the environment around us is safe and the crew are fine.The weather may affect the quality of the film, so I will just have to plan in advance and check the weather forecast.To do this , I am going to check BBC weather on the internet or watch  a television broadcast before I leave. I think that I will save the film from appearing unprofessional , as it is hard to shoot a film in the heavy rain.The natural lighting will effect the footage because it is unpredictable and can make the film look different to what I planned. I do not need any permission to shoot where I have planned.The film will look totally different when i shoot the material , as I  am going to edit it so it is in black and white.


There is the issue of other people in the frame, but these shots will be retaken in order to get them
perfect. I am currently having difficulty arranging my two actors to meet at the same place an time , so have decided to change my script to suit this issue.The film will now feature each main actor in two separate locations , taking on a mobile phone.This plot device allowed me to avoid making the film feel rushed. When Filming , I am aware that traffic may become an issue , because my film is supposed to feel isolated. Maybe I will need to go at an earlier or later time so I do not shoot during rush hour , as the film will lose this effect. The isolation and loneliness are key themes in the film and if the area is busy , this effect will be lost.